Oh that Ms. Jenny! What a taskmaster she is. This week, rather than 100 words to work with, in addition to the prompt, she has only allowed us 15. Normally, I try to write my story in exactly the number of words she dictates but I could not this time. So I added my 15 word allotment prior to the prompt below (in green).
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Straining to be heard
over cacophony of alarms,
from monitors
at her bedside,
she whispers:
“Before I die I want to….”
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17 comments:
Yes, I am spending way too much time on this thing this morning!
This is terrific.
This has a lot of punch. We always are so sure we have more time, another chance, will be the exception.
- Alice
i hope it is not too late for her to actualize...
15 words - exceptional!
I loved your take on this ... well done!!
Oh I hope that's not me one day.
oh you always craft something that makes me feel ...
Awwww I hope she spoke her wishes
I want to quietly slip away in my own bed while sleeping. Not hooked up to a bunch of machines in some institution. Is that too much to ask God for?~Ames
So sad - not the end any of us want, I'm sure.
So few words but much said. Good work.
That sure makes a person stop and think. Great job. laurie
Sad but so beautiful...
puerile ennui
Nice flip of the prompt. Simple but very effective...
Awe, Polly, this is so good. As a Hospice nurse, it touched me. Sometimes I wonder what our patients would say if we posed that question to them.
Namaste..........cj
Polly. This was amazing. It makes me wish everyone had someone by their side to whisper their last wish to.
Gosh, that is a confusing sentence.
My eyes are too teary to write anymore, though.
Polly. You are my hero.
Excellent job !
Devastating yet so touching and beautiful !
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