Friday, August 20, 2010

Flash Friday 55: The Deluge

Gentle breezes become wild and untamed

Lightning flash dances, pirouetting, 

clogging across billowing, rain laden clouds

The rhythmatic, rolling thunder crescendos ever closer

A deluge approaches

The cadence of raindrops’ accelerating tempo

morphs into sharp, staccato beats upon her psyche

Fearing sleep...

fearing her dreams...

she remains on guard

As the internal storm rages on. 

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I am participating in Flash Friday 55. This weekly meme is brought to you by G-Man, over at Mr. Know it All. The object is to write a story or prose in exactly 55 words. Come join us and link your 55 in Mr. Know it All's comment section. See you there!

26 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ack. hope she gets some sleep...
and the rainbows shine on clear skies inside...nice 55 polly.

Julie Schuler said...

Even though I just woke up, after reading that, I feel tired and cranky.

Susan Deborah said...

Excellent portrayal of the internal landscape. Lull her to sleep, as Brian mentioned.

Joy always,
Susan

P. S: I learnt new words through this post. Every line seems to have one!

Pelican Joe said...

Interesting Hun! An internal storm? Gentlemen (and women), start your metaphors!

Cheryl said...

Perfect 55! I was thinking how much I enjoy the tempest brewing and was caught up short learning this was internal. Not one of the storms I enjoy.

Jenny said...

The nice thing about storms is that everything is squeaky clean right after!

Jingle said...

lovely capture of story moments.
beautiful 55.

Steven Anthony said...

I love storms...well the ones from mother nature, the ones inside me, not so much

hugs
Steven Anthony
Man Dish~ Metro Style

I'm a full-time mummy said...

Oh I'd be up awake looking at the rainy and stormy sky! Just love it! Wonderful post btw, where did you get all this ideas to write it?! Awesome!

PattiKen said...

External storms invite sleep to come. The internal ones chase sleep away. But both can leave rainbows in their wake. I hope you see your rainbow soon.

Eric Alder said...

It's funny, so many 55's this week are either steamy hot or rainy cold. (Must be the weather!)

Meeko Fabulous said...

Love the imagery in this one! :)

Nessa said...

I love the images. I sleep very well during thunder storms but my dreams exhaust me every night.

Tina said...

Awesome, was not expecting the ending. Really nice!

gospelwriter said...

outer storms seem easier to handle than inner ones - why is that?

nice 55!

Monkey Man said...

Inner storms well described. Love this 55. Thanks for coming by mine. Visitors are always appreciated.

Thom said...

WOW...very well told and great description of our inner demons. I love this. Excellent 55 my friend. Have a wonderful Friday :)

Joanna Jenkins said...

Hey Polly, That was a good one!
Hope your summer is going well. jj

G-Man said...

Polly...
Theres a lot going on here young Lady. Much more than a few rain drops.
Most excellent 55 My Friend.
Wonderfully played...Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Me said...

I am so glad you stopped in and commented on my 55 this week...because you lead me back here. :)

This 55 speaks to me...loud & clear. Nicely written.
-C

razzamadazzle said...

I love how you shift from a storm to the internal storm. Very nicely done.

Teresa

Weezer said...

I hope that internal sunshine and calm skies replace those storms. You really should see about getting published, somewhere.
Love you, sweetie.

Buzzard said...

Rain Rain go away,
bring me some sleep so I may snore away!!

KB said...

I'm really feeling this one as the rain pours down outside.

Mine’s here.

Betty Manousos:cutand-dry.blogspot.com said...

Oh my, how could I have missed this one!
Awesome 55, Polly! :)
..lightning flash dances..love it!
B

Tracy said...

much, much, much of that weather here.

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