Friday, June 25, 2010

Flash Friday 55: He Came Home

He came home reeking of gin and vermouth
with a slight taint of Spanish olive and pearl onion as well.
His anger apparent by the blush of crimson upon his face and neck.
Maybe, just maybe, if she lay perfectly still, feigning sleep,
he would ignore her this time.
Unfortunately, that ploy almost never worked.

Although similar to yesterday's post, the 1st line of this poem came to me in a dream a few days ago. I apologize for the repetition of theme. I think I will take a break over the weekend.

I am participating in Flash Friday 55. This weekly meme is brought to you by G-Man, over at Mr. Know it All. The object is to write a story or prose in exactly 55 words. Come join us and link your 55 in Mr. Know it All's comment section. See you there!

22 comments:

Thom said...

Yikes...poor her. I would have had the 12 gauge out and ready myself LOL Very well done my friend :)

Kathleen said...

You have a great writing gift!!

Weezer said...

I agree. You definitely have a gift. This brings back some not-so-pleasant memories to me.
Have a great weekend, dear friend.
Stay cool. Get back to us on Monday and let us know what you did while you were not blogging.
:>

Jenn Erickson said...

Powerful and beautifully written Polly!

Tina said...

I don't mind repetition of theme AT ALL. Especially from someone as talented as you! Vivid, and tight, I felt her fear. Well done!

Betty Manousos:cutand-dry.blogspot.com said...

You're gifted, I do admire you! :))

Happy Friday!
~B xx

Alice Audrey said...

I love the second line. It gives the whole thing more depth.

Graceful said...

This is really compelling, Polly.

And thanks for suggesting the W Alphabe-Thursday -- that's very cool!

Monkey Man said...

Get out! Run away! Don't stay in this mess. Great 55. My 55 is HERE .

Ms Bibi said...

Great 55. So sad....someone needs to write a happy ending to that.

Mama Zen said...

This is so sad and so realistic!

G-Man said...

Polly...
You have just been on a fantastic 55 roll...WOW!!!
This was another gem..
Thanks for another winner.
Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...Galen

PS. LOVE the new Avatar Pic...
Classy...:-)

Steven Anthony said...

as always my friend, powerful and well done ;)

Cynthia@RunningWithLetters said...

I wonder why this theme has been impressed upon your heart of late? Very descriptive writing, Polly.

moondustwriter said...

it's what comes next...

nice 55

mine is here

Michelle Hoad said...

You have such a beautiful way with words. I however, rarely use correct grammer, or punctuation, or capitalization for that matter. Why do you keep coming back?

otin said...

That is some heavy subject matter! I love the intense feeling in the writing!

Joanna Jenkins said...

Nice, nice job!
jj

Heather of the EO said...

You DO have a great writing gift, which has already been said. I'm saying it again because it's so true. ;)

Brian Miller said...

oh man...an all to real 55...i think i may know her...nice 55.

just getting back from vacay...catching up!

Julie Schuler said...

If this is followed by three consecutive hours of fighting, shouting, and his head getting slammed under a car hood- it would be like my twelfth birthday!

Erin said...

it makes my stomach lurch for whatever happens next. my heart is beating fast....

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