Tuesday, March 15, 2011

Tuesday's Tale: Facebook Story #1

Last evening, while awaiting to pick up my daughter from rehearsal I decided to have a little fun on Facebook. I wrote a prompt and then invited my friends to participate in a story game…where each posting becomes a part of a (hopefully) coherent story. This was last night’s result.

(Polly’s prompt) The dark haired beauty pressed her face against the window with both longing and dread.

(James) The landscape cascaded by like a silent film. The bleakness of her prospects was reflected in the giant cracks of dried earth which she viewed as like canyons from the air rather than the ancient train in which she sat.

(Patti) Longing for the future of what is to be and dreading the past that could change that future. How much longer could she sit here knowing that her life could change in such a way?

(Donna) The monotony of the view from her window was punctuated only by the repetitious clatter of the tracks. As much as she tried to think of something else, all she could think about was the dread she felt. The unending rhythm of the tracks only increased her tension. There seemed to be no route for escape.   

(Polly) But then again, the conflicting emotions come back and there is that part of her ready for the change to come.

(Donna) She smiled to herself faintly as a dark form advanced toward her from the back of the train, and she suddenly thought about the machete she had hidden in her satchel.

(James) Weapons. Why always weapon.

(Donna) It COULD be a TOOL!!!!! An extra large letter opener, for example.

(James) The shadowy figure lingered.

(Donna) as she thought about the many uses she had put her trusty machete/office implement in her former position as Chief of Staff to the CEO.

(James) She heard the familiar click, memories flashed like lightening.

(Donna) The shadowy figure drew back for a moment, as if sensing the nature of her thoughts.

(Dena) she hesitated, should she grab her satchel now? Or wait... no... she slowly reached under her seat and put it carefully in her lap, when the train lurched and screeched a horrid ear piercing squeal....she looked up just in time to see....

(Donna) her extra large letter opener going to town, even though there were no letters in sight.

(Dena) ?? What now she asked ? Did anyone see her act in this crazy way? Other than the shadowy figure? Where did he go?

(Donna) After a few minutes, when she realized that she was no longer at her old office, she stopped swinging her machete/letter opener wildly about the train. He said, with irritation, "Lady. That's what I have a hole punch for. Please leave the ticket punching to the professionals." Her cheeks aflame, she sat down and began to ponder her fate again.  

(James) Damn, she thought. Once. Is that too much to ask?

(Donna) The train ground its way back into motion.

(Polly) She guarded herself so as not to be so hypnotized by the rhythm of the tracks.

(Donna) But the more she tried to ignore the sound, the more the tracks seemed to be taunting her. "Who do you think you are?" they clicked. "why do you think things will be different this time?" they clacked.  

(Dena) 'It is because I am better', yes... I am better and getting better every day... it will be different, it has to be...

(Donna) "That's what you said LAST time," she heard a voice mocking her. Where was the voice coming from? It no longer seemed to be the tracks talking to her.

(Dena) was it in her head?! No! NO! Not again!! Please, oh please.. I am better, I know I am!! I worked so hard...she silently sobbed...

(Donna) The tears traced a path down her cheeks. As she tried to get a grip on her emotions, she heard yet another voice. 

(Dena)It was gruff...eerily familiar..

(Donna)  Could this be her future talking to her?

(Dena) Or was it her past?

(Donna) Alas, it occurred to her that her past would also be her future, and for the first time, her heart felt as bleak as the arid scene outside her window.

(Dena) she sighed a deep sigh... there is no hope...no hope at all, her eyes closed as she was getting so tired, she nodded off to sleep with the humming and rhythm of the train lulling her to dreamland...

(Donna) The end???

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I don't know...should I do this again? Maybe I could do a weekly meme where I post an original   prompt on my blog and see how the story progresses within the comments. What do you all think? Or is this just a lazy way of having other people write my blog for me? :o)

13 comments:

Ray said...
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Brian Miller said...

totally do it again...this is awesome...love prompts like that and i may steal the idea for one stop....so wish i was still on facebook...

☆☆Mumsy said...

That's wonderful! You should do it again..

There is nothing wrong with posting the prompt on your blog. I've participated in this kind on other blogs before..

J. Kwiatkowski-Schuler said...

I'm surprised no one steered it towards sex. It seems like, given the opportunity, a story will get steered towards violence or sex or both. I sense a lack to commit, but maybe next time will be better.

L.B. said...

That's great! FB seems like a great place for it because people seem to check FB more than blogs and thus the chances of quick and lots of participation are higher than on the blog, but at the same time on the blog might make for some more well-thought out responses.

Hmmm..... a predicament, but I'd say to do it again. You never know what kind of stuff you'll get and as long as it's not obscene or anything like that, it's all good!

Joshua said...

First, @ J. Kwiatkowski-Schuler: "maybe next time will be better" - That's what she said.

Do the meme if you want, but I just want to be Facebook friends now so I can participate!

blueviolet said...

I hope these people are bloggers because this is good stuff! They really ran with it!

HeatherLynn said...

Personally, i find my own creativity is fueled sometimes by the creativity of others....

Never underestimate the power of interaction. It breeds creativity...

It's not lazy....although you questing your laziness made me smile...you're endearing that way!

xoox
~hl~

Kathleen said...

What a FUN idea!! Why don't you do a link-up and invite readers to take the prompt and the FB challenge on, say, Monday. Then link up on, say, Friday with the results.

Willoughby said...

That was a fun read! I think it would be great to do the same thing on your blog. You could try it and see how it works out before deciding whether to make it a weekly feature.

Remember when we used to do that on the Recipe Exchange? Those stories took some wild turns!

Nessa said...

I thought this was great and I'm sorry I missed participating.

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

I need to get on facebook more often. I totally missed out on this! What fun!

G-Man said...

Good Idea Pollyanna...
I don't get on Facebook much.

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