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Once upon
this life of mine
there was his promise.
Promises of love,
of hope spoken
in soft gentle voice,
of dreams yet to be fulfilled.
I laughed through tears
when he burst out in song
and sang sweetly to me,
“I’d even catch a grenade for ya!”
I believed him.
Reality set in.
The silence is deafening.
Soundless shouts erupt
from my heart,
loudly, clearly.
I listen to inner truth.
Wisdom gained
through epiphany
that no one,
not even him,
can catch that grenade
while wandering through
personal minefields
battling demons of their own.
My first step towards healing.
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26 comments:
Very nice and very thought provoking - it makes you want to look inward.
ok, i love that song...and a great write...walking through the minefield yeah..not a lot of fun at times but has to be done...
This is very probing. I wish I could write with your depth!
Brilliant and razor sharp. I related to that.
Polly, even your prose is a poem. I adore you!!!
Awesome take on the prompt...battling inner demons...very insightful !!!
Polly, I'm a first-time visitor to your site from Cleveland. I clicked-through from the "Deckside Thoughts" blog and read a few of your posts.
I liked your bio other than being a Carolina Panther fan. LOL. But you can just as easily make fun of me - I'm a Steelers fan living in Cleveland.
Anyway, I enjoyed your blog and wanted to comment. Thanks.
This is incredibly deep. I'm so impressed with your being able to use that prompt in such a beautiful poem. It's just great.
xoRobyn
Love it love it love it! So impressing that you used poetry for this challenging prompt. Nicely done.
Michelle
Introspective.
I love how everyone's interpreted this differently.
Pearl
I'm with Pearl-- Love you poem and the comments too.
Very nice job,
xo jj
Great job on this one, Polly. And the message is 100% true.
=)
Healing those scars is the hard part - when you start to realize that the grenade catcher is juggling his own ammo.
Great job on this!
Lovely poem, Polly!
I am always amazed at how you can turn dorky prompts into something with depth!
Well done!
Thank you for your kind words about my SC-text. I thought this one was hard.
Best wishes,
Anna
P.S.
I love the name 'Daisy' too. (Read your comment to Cherie.) But I had to choose a name that rhymes with Daisy.
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC week 42 Maisy-Jane
Polly, wonderful job with your Centus! That was such a beautiful and deep poem! Very touching!
Words like "Soundless shouts erupt from my heart" and "wandering through personal minefields" really ground this peace and make it real. Great Centus!
Namaste..........cj
PS Thanks for visiting and leaving your kind comment!
.........cj
"Wandering through personal minefields..." This was a beautiful take on the prompt. And the fact that you could write such a thought provoking piece from a silly song prompt speaks volumes about your writing ability. Bravo! Kat
Breathtaking, heart wrenching poem in less than 100? Priceless.
oh this is so good, we both went in kind of the same direction ..finally and I thought more would...but you really aced this one way better than I did! This is great!
Wonderful! I love it!
Nice twist--and thought provoking.
Donna V.
The reward lies in what comes after. Nice write.
Polly. What beautiful, tragic and poignant writing.
I guess it's hard to understand why we often have to catch our own grenades. Why can't someone else just do it for us, and let us know when the explosion is finished?
You're amazing.
Polly. What beautiful, tragic and poignant writing.
I guess it's hard to understand why we often have to catch our own grenades. Why can't someone else just do it for us, and let us know when the explosion is finished?
You're amazing.
what a sad story. i could feel your characters pain throughout.
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