(Prompt is in GREEN)
deep within
she knew
time was nearing
despite desperate
denials
fearful, bitter truth
came through child’s cry
“Mommy, please stop!”
how hard she had tried:
countless times
countless ways
a few days here
a few weeks there
eventually succumbing
to his always appealing
seductive spell...
seductive spell...
his charismatic charm
controlling encounters:
different places
different times
secretly meeting
hiding
hiding
even cheating with
others…
never worked
always resulting in
always resulting in
guilt
remorse
shame
deep down she knew
he was toxic…
he could
and would
kill…
destroying her soul
and yet
saying goodbye
was harder than she
thought
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10 comments:
it always is...and we cant do it alone often....
I feel strongly about this subject, and you expressed it well, Polly.
I did go back to my poem and read it again with the new word you suggested. And you're right. That made for a powerful change of paradigm.
=)
Great writing. Scary stuff.
~Melody
MerrieMelody.blogspot.com
Great treatment of a difficult subject. The words suggest the figurative addiction of being in an unhealthy relationship, but the powerful image suggests another form of addiction. In the end, it doesn't really matter. They are equally toxic. Well done!
Addiction does that. Nice take on the prompt
Psychologically taut, well done!
Polly, you are just a wonder! You are blessed with such a gift. That's all I can say.
This is powerful, as is the addiction. I see my father in it, battling alcoholism, and I see the old me in it struggling with an addiction to a boyfriend in the past who was a charming, manipulative narcissist.
Well-penned, Polly!
Best wishes,
Anna
Goodbye Pierre - SCwk 96
You may also like to read this story expanded to 400 words for RFWers:
Anna's RFWers Challenge No.33 'I love you because...'
My daughter sits in jail this weekend for another fall from her program.
And these words seared my soul.
I cannot imagine the kind of courage people have to turn away over and over again.
That kind of bravery commands my utmost admiration.
And prayers.
Wow.
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