Saturday, October 30, 2010

Saturday Centus: Startled

Ms. Jenny has thrown a kink into the regular Saturday Census party. Instead of 100 words, today we are only allotted 50 to tell our story, excluding the prompt. She's a task master, that Jenny! I decided to meet that challenge head on and below is what I came up with before tackling the duties of the day. (The prompt is in bold and underlined)

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Cold, dark, and dreary describes that particular moonless night. Quite unusual this far south of the Mason-Dixon Line.  Curled up by the comforting fire within the hearth, I was startled by sudden, incessant, ceaseless pounding. Carefully cracking open the front door amid animated shouting I was surprised to learn that  Abraham Lincoln was a lot shorter than I thought he would be.

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Happy Trick or Treating! 
Don't forget tomorrow night is All Hallow's Eve.
May many superheroes, fairytale princesses
and magical, mystical creatures 
show up at your front door!



Jenny Matlock

25 comments:

Deborah said...

Very well done, I loved it!!!
and I'm with you on the 1/2 inch ... very important :o)

Brian Miller said...

haha. nice. could he recite the gettysburg address? if so i would have given him extra candy

Jackie said...

Yup Happy Hallowe'en to you ! I haven't checked out saturday centus even. I have lots to do today , don't know if I'll get er done but I hope .

Kat said...

I almost died when I saw that we only had 50 words this week. You met the challenge brilliantly, I love this! Kat

Teresa said...

Very well done!

When we had only 50 words I stripped my story of descriptions - you went the other way and I could picture myself right there with you. Fantastic!

Wysteria said...

Very nice... I haven't tried this one yet. Have so many things to do, perhaps later.

Thanks for stopping by my blog and hope to read more of yours.


Wysteria

Terra said...

Oh yeah, this was cool! 50 was tough but you nailed it

My name is PJ. said...

Nice job. This was a tough week~!

Kathleen said...

Well done! You used your 50 words very wisely!!

Sue said...

Nice! Really creative use of the prompt.

=)

jfb57 said...

I don't know anything about Lincoln so will have to do some research about the height thing!!

Judie said...

I wonder how many Lincolns we'll have knocking on our door! Very clever!!

Viki said...

I liked this a lot. 50 words hope we don't ever get less, ha. I don't think I've ever had Abe knock at my door. Maybe this will be the year LOL.

Splendid Little Stars said...

I love how you set the mood and the scene!

Short Poems said...

I liked this, creative write and wisely :)

Cheryl said...

You just drifted right into this without a backwards glance. Sure made it look easy.

Tgoette said...

LOL! You don't see many Presidents trick or treating, but this year could be their year! Great job!

Susannah said...

Very nicely done. :-)

Jenny said...

Those 50 words were tough, indeed.

But you did an amazing job here!

Great story. This actually felt more like, oh, 83 words AT LEAST!

I'm loving this weeks stories for sure.

Jingle Poetry said...

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Malisa said...

Guess Abe was out doing a little door to door campaigning!:) I just posted my story. Hope you stop by and read it.

Malisa

RawknRobynsGoneBlogWild said...

I love how you took us back in time. This felt very authentic. Nicely done.
xoRobyn

RockiBottom said...

very well done. you managed to say a lot in 50 words or less

cj Schlottman said...

Great idea linking this prompt to Trick or Treating! I could just feel the warmth of your cozy fire. Strong imagery here.

Thanks for a great post..........cj

Anna said...

Beautiful story! Abe Lincoln as a trick-or-treater! Wonderful use of the prompt!
Best wishes,
Anna
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